The grudge is undoing (poem for poet rally 39)

Since I am digginng Haiku, decieded to broaden my learning and try another Japanese form, the Tanka!

Fallen on deaf ears;
The words mean nothing because
Anger prevails hard.
Wash away darkness; today
Brings forth the arms to forgive.

For Poetry Rally 39!

Comments

very well done Tanka..
Thanks for contributing to poets rally...
have fun.

Jingle
Paulog30 said…
Your welcome Jingle! Having lots of fun and will read and comment asap!
Anonymous said…
perfect thoughts at all times! :)
Paulog30 said…
Thank you, enjoyed finally trying a different poetic form!
Anonymous said…
nice tanka!
Anonymous said…
cool tanka buddha! my wk 39 is here.. http://fiveloaf.wordpress.com/2009/11/17/regret/
Rashmi said…
Beautiful tanka...
here is mine
http://poem-myworldofexcitement.blogspot.com/2011/03/poem56ownership.html
Maggie said…
Very nice.

I have yet to try the tanka, but now I am inspired. : )
Paulog30 said…
Good, good!
Anonymous said…
you are on a roll. I am tempted to try one as well. Is that your first? 5,7,5,7,7...NOT bad at all :) kudos to you!!!

thanks for the link for march madness...
Paulog30 said…
Thanks and welcome! Yes, this was my first Tanka. Trying to learn more styles of poetry, slowly.
Anonymous said…
mmmm truth
Anonymous said…
Strong: great thought, good choice of words: I like the 'words mean nothing - Anger prevails hard/heart' - is the latter meant as homonym?

Thanks, Paolo, for introducing the Tanka - this opens very interesting new aspects of japanese verse. Being myself a haiku fan I'll try it out soon :)
Paulog30 said…
Your welcome Dagt! I am trying to learn more Japanese forms right now, and this was the original style I believe that existed in Japan first. Good luck with it!
Lolamouse said…
very nice tanka! I find them more difficult than haiku myself. I agree with your thoughts in the poem as well. when anger prevails, ears are closed.
Paulog30 said…
Thank you! I can see what you mean, both forms expect you to say much with so little. Very tough indeed! I am loving it though, haiku has become my favorite form.
Anonymous said…
I had never heard of a tanka before, thanks for the learning and for the pleasure of reading such an excellent write!
Paulog30 said…
Thank you guys! I have some fascination with the Japanese, so it makes sense for me to try some of the various Japanese writing styles.
Anonymous said…
Nice Tanka .. u inspire me .. should attempt one myself .
Paulog30 said…
Wonderful, I have never inspired anyone really, thanks for that ! Good luck!
Anonymous said…
Beautiful. I really like the Tanka form.
Paulog30 said…
Thanks, I love it and haiku. Saying much within a small format is tough. Yet, it makes theimagination work harder!
Anonymous said…
I love Tankas too. This is a good one and I was glad there were two forgiving arms at the end...
Paulog30 said…
Thanks, trying to find some styles I can enjoy besides haiku. This one is really good to work with too!