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Tritina for Form for all: On Tritinas (dVersepoets.com)

Floating in a dream intoxicated
Mouth agape, succulent flesh is orgasmic
It is here that I am serene

Open path, soft and serene
Suffusion upon breadth intoxicated
Zeal within pleasure orgasmic

End is near, memory remains orgasmic
To pleasure encountered and found serene
Echo wanders in waves intoxicated

Being intoxicated, vision orgasmic, moment is serene
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Laurie Kolp said…
Hmm... I can tell what's on your mind.
8/30/12, 7:21 PM
Paulog30 said…
Hahaha, you may be quite surprised, lol!
8/30/12, 7:27 PM
Brian Miller said…
well now...there is a bit of an afterglow upon reading this one...ha....nicely played to the form...
8/30/12, 7:44 PM
Paulog30 said…
Hahaha, perhaps, lol. Was tough for a first try, but somehow worked. Thanks bro!
8/30/12, 7:47 PM
Bodhirose said…
Hey, glad you gave this form a try...nice you find serenity amidst the orgasmic...I say that's a pretty good combo..
8/30/12, 10:11 PM
Paulog30 said…
Thank you much, was tough form to try, but I enjoyed it.
8/30/12, 10:28 PM
Claudia said…
nice...love these open paths..serene feel to this..and i like the sensual touch as well
8/31/12, 12:09 AM
Paulog30 said…
Many thanks Claudia!
8/31/12, 1:01 AM
Anonymous said…
Is it your mind or ours that leads us in that certain direction?

Fun use of the form.

Tony
8/31/12, 9:37 AM
Paulog30 said…
Both, I in words and you in thought, lol!
8/31/12, 9:40 AM
Semaphore said…
Well, I guess when you start your tritina by choosing specifically those words, you'll definitely get readers thinking in a certain direction! Yes, it did somehow work, and the next time around I'm sure things won't be as tough as you might have found it this time. Good work!
8/31/12, 9:18 PM
Paulog30 said…
I am glad I could create one vision fron another, :). Thank you, and I plan on working on more for sure.
8/31/12, 9:28 PM
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